On a dark Tuesday night, I went in my mum's car to the National Airport. You see I was going to visit my dad in Wellington. First I got my luggage on the trolley and raced down to the receptionist that checked in the Unaccompanied Minor's (UM for short or UM NR).
Next I weighed my luggage on the strange looking scale that looked like a treadmill with no tread. Then I put my luggage onto the convert-belt, the luggage was going all the way to the aeroplane.
After that I zigzagged all the way to gate 16 but I stopped to gulp my Lift drink as fast as I could and waited for all the people to go inside the plane because I like to go last.
Sadly it was time to go to Wellington, and I had my final steps with my mum till it was time to get on the plane and fly to Wellington. I went to the very back of the plane and was the only UM and I liked it because it was awesome and I got lots of attention.
Soon the plane was on and U-turned to the runway and ...... WHOOSH!!!
Suddenly I felt as if I was a Frisbee tossed by another person's hand. Finally I felt the excitement flow from me as I saw Wellington. It was extremely amazing flying by myself on a plane.
The best Holiday ever.
Great descriptions of how you felt, Emmanuel. Make sure you read it back to yourself and proof read carefully.
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ReplyDeleteI love the way you have described flying as feeling like "a frisbee tossed by another person's hand"! Very poetic.
I think Mr C's advise is very wise. It is important to read your writing back to yourself back during the recrafting stage. Another part of re-crafting a recount is to make sure you are using words that describe the past. An example of that would be to say "I stopped to gulp my lift drink as fast as I could" rather than "as fast as I can".
Thank you for sharing this with us. I am really looking foward to seeing how your writing progresses throughout the rest of the year :)